The Adventurous Blog-Strider



I have carefully selected three of my talented peers (forced in their direction) and been given a very special task (school assignment) to critique (compliment) and evaluate (arguable) their meticulously written work. And also to get rid of Zachary-In-Parentheses as his sarcasm is annoying (no it isn't).

I first started with Taylor, who had a fast paced and metaphor-loving style that drew me in like a storm and left me wanting more. Her technique was consistent yet was constantly original (unoriginal originality of course). I had a fantastic time reading her work. My comments for her were:
Greetings, Taylor,
I really enjoyed reading this. The clipped, fast-paced writing (and that is nothing but a compliment) really endeared to me and I found myself getting into this story. You tied the coffee stick in brilliantly and the twist was, albeit, a little sudden, but not at all in a bad way. The ending was perfect.
It makes me want to carry around a bag of Smarties—although I'd never have an opportunity to give them to anyone, as I don't ever say anything bright...but more for me, right?
Have a lovely night,
Zachary
Greetings, Taylor,
This is the second thing of yours that I've read, and I'm unashamed to admit that your particular writing style is greatly fascinating to me. I noticed a lot of clever metaphors and similes that I can relate to, but I especially enjoyed the line "I am grateful for all I have seen and broken by all the things I never will." I'd like to learn more, or rather read more, about the things you write and what inspires you. You clearly have some true talent.
Have a lovely night,
Zachary

Secondly was Emma, who I have the joy of sitting at the same table with ("joy" could be argued) and Zachary-In-Parentheses needs to be quiet (never). Her style was passionate, meaningful. She never wasted a word and tied everything together so it contrasted in beautiful, colorful ways. She knew what she wanted to say, and she said it. Emma's technique made me want to read more. My comments for her were:
Greetings, Emma,
I really enjoyed this story, and how you progressed through it. I was fascinated by the absence of plot, and the focus on true meaning and how you were trying to express that meaning. This story was a splendid use of your past experiences and memories, and you tied it together very well. Thank you for sharing it with me. Also, I like the dog a lot.
By the way, I really enjoy how you set up your blog.
Have a lovely night,
Zachary
Greetings, Emma,
Again your distinct writing style and personality truly appealed to me, especially your incessant focus on your love of animals. I really enjoyed the lines about being an equestrian, as your descriptions were marvelously written and executed, pairing with each other in perfect harmony and contrast. I am also a lover of all living things (although I can't help but make a sarcastic comment every now and then and consequently have a glue stick thrown at me). I'd love to learn more about your love of videography and the work you've done in it. There was a time I had a passion for it as well and I still have an interest in photography. Good work on your I Am poem, Emma!
Have a lovely night,
Zachary

And last but not least (possibly least) was Ben. His style was drastically different from either of the two girls, but I did not perceive this as a negative. His mark was humor, his technique was casual and carefree, and he said what he wanted to say. Instead of the elaborate metaphors of more "accomplished" authors he used straightforward, surprisingly vivid imagery that was often more effective then a sentence four times longer. Although it's not what I usually read (meaning blogs in general) I had a great time reading both of his pieces as well. My comments for him were:
Greetings, Ben,
Your story was a drastic deviation from the serious, the emotional, and the meaningful. Instead of seeking some hidden moral and centering a short-lived plot around it, you cut your own path and crafted a story of pure comedy. It was an enjoyable read, and altogether a very unique experience. Continue to write about random, criminally inclined animals, because different is never a bad thing (that can be argued but that's beside the point).
Besides, I don't think owls and foxes belong together, right?
Have a lovely night,
Zachary
Greetings, Ben,
Your carefree, loose way of writing led to an enjoyable, fast-paced read that cut to the point and didn't draw me away. You were unashamed of your style, to the point that grammar was hardly necessary, and this isn't a bad thing at all. It's exciting to be in my last year of high school, but I wouldn't say I'm "happily" unemployed. Continue writing, Ben.
Have a lovely night,
Zachary

Now go away Zachary-In-Parentheses (you can't tell me what to do).
Have a lovely night,
Zachary