It was an enchanted place, Lily’s
pond. The secret grove was brimming with lively sounds and vibrant colors, all
spinning in a mesmerizing dance of pure, unforgiving beauty. Every soft,
nature-scented breeze, delicate flower, and unique, green-tinged leaf spoke of
life. The crystal waters of the pond lapped gently against the supple grass reinforcing
the shore, and sunlight sparkled across rippling waves. Any stranger would gasp
at their gorgeous surroundings, and find themselves lost for hours among its
magical properties. But the memories behind those surreal colors dampen my
once deep love for Lily’s pond. When walking alongside the untainted waters of
the pond, I can only think of the little girl who breathed sweet innocence and
was the picture of childlike perfection that took the pond and called it her
own. The young child who spent hours inside her hidden place, guarding its
secrets with a fervor only children can have, falling hopelessly in love with
the animals and the nature. So many times I looked outside to watch her run
among the trees, chasing her creatures and tumbling down grassy inclines. I
lost count of the times I wandered through to find her sleeping, nestled in the
warm embrace of a tree, or curled on the grass. But one memory stands well
above the rest, of watching the gentle wind push my little girl, and the
ancient trees trip her, and the liquid blue waters steal her away from me. One
moment replays itself over and over, because I wasn’t fast enough. That
enchanted place is Lily’s pond, because she will always live there, and the
pond will always have her.

I could feel this heading for a darker turn as I read, sensing that the tranquility and beauty would be marred by a tragedy. This makes me think of "This is a Photograph of Me" by Margaret Atwood and also a book I read a while back where the characters were tormented by the memory of not being "fast enough" to save a friend of theirs from a very similar fate. That last line is especially haunting. I like this.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your comment. I really enjoyed writing this, even if it had a darker tone. It's always been my style to have a resounding last word or paragraph, something to tie everything together at the last moment. Not everything I write is like that, but I've noticed that I have a tendency to do so.
DeleteHave a lovely night,
Zachary
Hey, Zachary! This is incredibly beautiful and sad. You did a fantastic job of depicting the pond, and "its magical properties." Knowing that the little girl had played at the pond all her life to forever stay there... Maybe Lily will bring a certain magic to the pond in the end, just as she had in life.
ReplyDeleteMeghan
Good morning, Meghan.
DeleteI feel like my morbid writing style is a far cry from my sarcastic personality.
Have a lovely night,
Zachary